As a student, Pascal was lazy yet he still got good grades. He was one of those students rarely said something in class but when he did it was earth shattering. it changed the point of view of the entire class. He would rarely do his homework yet he would pass all his classes effortlessly. He was a natural. Nothing he did came off as forced and on purpose. He was so suave with the women yet at the same time a bit mysterious.
As the varsity cheerleader team tried to start up a conversation with him at lunch, he kept his eyes glued to his book with the title that no one had heard of. The book described him, unknown yet so cool. It was not like he was trying to play hard to get with these girls. He was just merely "too good" for high school girls.
On weekends Pascal didnt bother going to the high school loft parties out in Brooklyn with his peers. Pascal would hop on the uptown 1 train to Columbia university and attend those frat parties. He did not bother with girlfriends. He did not have the time or patience to deal with women for more than one night. He was a heavy drinker yet he never got drunk. Yet through all this he had one problem. Pascal only didnt get involved with people because he had major trust issues. He was beaten as a kid by his father and was fucked over by his mother. He did not know how to trust people and feel safe around them because all his life he was around people who could not be trusted. This prevented him from having close friends.
Soon enough Pascal himself realized it and knew he had to do something about it and he met Roxy. A college girl who had similar problems to Pascal. Her mother passed away and she lived with her aunt. She on the other hand had an ex boyfriend who beat her. Pascal came to realize how what they had in common made him closer to her and gradually came to trust her. Pascal still kept his cool ways and trends after overcoming his problem.
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hi max i thought i would comment on your post.
ReplyDeletefor one this story is unique. it takes on a perspective unlike the others i have seen. your character faces an emotional conflict different from the other conflicts that are physical, tangible, and about high school. another thing i found interesting about this story was that it was that the cool guy, Pascal, was seen on both sides of the spectrum. in one aspect he was extremely intelligent and did wonderfully in school not your average cool, and on the other hand he went to parties and drinks. the contrast was very interesting.
I like the way you describe a kind of coolness in a person who people are attracted to because he doesn't let them get too close. He seems more mature than the other high school kids but it turns out this is because he has been abused by his parents and doesn't trust anyone. It takes meeting someone who has similar trust problems to help him form a close relationship. The kind of character you describe seems very real to me.
ReplyDeletei wrote a post before this, but never actually posted it. lets try this again. i liked your story. i will remember reading this one. i was a little shocking by the turning point in the story. where Pascal is this cool guy who gets by in all his classes, does well with the girls, and lives by his own agenda. there was more that meets the eye with Pascal. Good story
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ReplyDeleteI was pleaently surprised to see you actually did this assinment. I'm glad to see you have a creative side.
Your story was interesting and although you were straight forward with your perception of whats cool you suggested it in a differen way then others.
I got from your story that a quality you find cool is trust and loyalty. Althouh it took tradgedy between Pascal and Roxy to help them relate to one another, they were able to confide in each other because of that common bond.
Your "cool person" seems a lot more realistic, sadly, then most others. People who are seen as cool are tytpically those who think their better then everyone else, which made you character that much more beleiveable. You embodied the egotistical jerk quite nicely. Well done.
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- Alicia
I liked how you explained what the character felt as well as how other people saw and thought about him. You portrayed a typical person viewed as cool who thought they were to good for their peers. You then showed how even people who are so arrogant have many insecurities and issues with themselves. The rust issue showed this and in turn the story was much deeper than an average story about someone cool.
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